Practice IOC
Planning:
1 MINTUE Introduction:
Thesis:
The Handmaid's Tale
Margaret Atwood
Dystopian novel from p.o.v. of Offred, a handmaid.
Atwood uses first person p.o.v. through Offred to show that Offred is constantly reminding herself of her new "context" in life. Three ways this happens is through the diction of the words "need" and "must". Through repetition of the word "I" and descriptive language. (15-18). And through using short syntax to describe her life and reminding herself that it is only within this "context".
2/3 MINUTES Idea 1: Diction of the words "need" and "must"
These lines all show that Offred is constantly reminding herself, even within the short space of 40 lines, that she has a new life now, (lines 4 and 12) a new "context". She reminds herself that in her new life, the situation with the Commander is to be taken seriously (lines 31, 32, 33)
2/3 MINUTES Idea 2: Repetition of "I" and descriptive language (lines 15-18)
This shows how she is reminding herself of how she is now...
2/3 MINUTES Idea 3: "context is all" is her final reminder using short syntax (line 40 and kind of 39)
1 MINUTE Conclusion: The Main Idea of this passage is CONTEXT in regards to Offreds new life, because
there is the diction of the words "need" and "must".
Repetition of the word "I" and descriptive language. (15-18).
Using short syntax to describe her life and reminding herself that it is only within this "context".
Analyzed Passage:
Self-Grade:
Criterion A - 5 - My comments were generally supported by references to the text, and I think I showed adequate understanding of the text.
Criterion B - 3 - I think I could have done better in pointing out more literary features, but I had adequate awareness and illustration of the ones I did point out, but I gave myself this low of a score because I didn't really talk about the effect on the reader.
Criterion C - 3 - I think I got a little clumsy near the end in terms of coherency, but I think I generally followed my Intro, Body, Conclusion plan.
Criterion D - 3 - I think my language was okay, I stumbled a lot because I'm tired, and I think I was a little unclear near the end, especially, because I repeated myself a lot.
I noticed in your planning that you allotted a specific amount of time (in minutes) for each point you intended to make. I think this is very clever in terms of pacing and something I'll be sure to incorporate into my final IOC, as I went over the 10 minute mark during practice. I think you do a wonderful job of noticing the little things, such as repetition of "I" and the use of works "need" and "must." Diction is the literary I tend to overlook the most, so I need to take a page from your book in that sense. Overall, I enjoyed listening to your recording and think your self-assessment was fair!
ReplyDeleteHey!
ReplyDeleteA: 5
B: 5
C: 3
D: 4
I'm excited to hear your real IOC- you did a nice job here. Some thoughts: I like the background you give and that you pretty much jump right in (be careful that you aren't spending too much time giving background)- you sound calm and organized. Need a bit more introduction here; additionally, there was no thesis. Remember that the whole point of the IOC is to construct an oral essay in which you decide on the purpose of the passage and how the author develops that purpose. You really just jump into analyzing what you notice in the passage and it's not linked together. I think you've got a great use of devices here, but keep linking back to the overall purpose of the passage. That's really the effect. Keep thinking...why is Atwood doing what she's doing in the passage? How do you know? I also think you have clear organization in your planning, but thinking about the two questions I mention will help keep it more organized orally. As far as analysis/devices- use the big 5: https://www.thinkib.net/englishalanglit/page/11116/the-big-5